ACADEMIC WRITING

Dear Mr. Assadollahi,

Let me give a number of comments on your writing:

 

1. It is better for Muslims to say Allah rather than God.
2. Ramadan is the month of Allah
3. All humans are invited to the feast of Allah.
4. “Every year Muslims have diet in Ramadan every day they fast from morning till night”.  There are two sentences above. So, you need a full stop after Ramadan in the following way:

“Every year Muslims have diet in Ramadan. Every day they fast from morning till night”.

5. “Diet”, “morning”, and “night” are not suitable for your purpose. Instead, say “fast”, “dawn”, and “dusk”. Sentence number 5 cab be summarized as below: “Muslims fast from dawn to dusk in this month.”

Ramadan is a month of God

  All human invited to banquet (feast) of God .Every year Moslems have diet in Ramadan every day they fast from morning till night.

It is considered as worship and they do this (it) to obey God's orders. They believe that all of them are the God’s guest. (At) at first I don’t realized that, what kind of feast is this (First, I did not realize what kind of feast it was). You have to eat nothing.  

 Moslems believe that God fate all being in this month (all beings fate is determined by Allah in this month) and if you pray something he will grant that to you. I realized in which feast host can climb?? that I  grant all thing you want   except Allah.