The rate of divorce in Yazd is low. People (in Yazd) are very religious and they act (according to) Islam’s instruction(s). In addition(,) the rate of unemployment is low.The women do not live in luxury and they are content. They believe that‚ unlike bread and water‚ luxuries are not necessary to  life. finaly (Finally) the rate of drug addict (addiction) is low too.

Comments: Sentences are short and simple, but the paragraph has a good structure. You are improving very well, Mr. Mirkhalili. Please continue writing.

Many farmers have hard days. They must work hard nearly during the year. They work in (the) fall, winter, spring, and summer. They may face (different types of) dangers: snakes, (and) scorpions (may bit them), (and) some (other) animals may destroy the farm. Pigs may eat potatoes, jackals may (eat the) grapes. Plant louses may eat the leaves of trees. When the fruit(s)  are ripe, some economic policies of government may cause some problems about selling them. This kind of problems makes farming a hard works (job).

Thanks a lot Mr. Sharifi,

The paragraph is well-sturctured. It has a topic sentence and a number of supporting sentences. But, it looks monotonous because all the supporting sentences are Simple Sentences. Good writers use a veriety of sentence types, such as complex and compound sentences.

Spending to (too) much time in (on) study (studying) is laziness. A person who study (studies) a lot is usually a man who prefer not to think to much does not think much. In addition,  the person by this character (such a person) usually lacks creativity for that (because) he (he/she) just want (wants) to take advantage from other's experience. Furthermore, ganing (gaining) experience by just reading won’t be useful enough unless you (one) gain (gains) it practically. So, study should accompany by (be accompanied with) thinking, having creativity, and trying to be more practical (practicality).

Comments:

1. There are too many spelling errors which show you do not have a "revising stage" in your writing process. As a matter fact, to write a good paragraph you should follow three stages: Pre-writing Stage, Writing Stage, and Revisng Stage. After writng the first draft, good writers read their draft once more for spelling and grammatical mistakes.
2. To avoid bias, good writers use he/she which refers to both men and women. Since the Farsi word "?U" is neutral with respect to gender, Iranians writing in English should be careful not use "he" for both men and women.
3. Your last sentence lacked paralellism. I corrected it.

I have to remind some of the writers to read the Farsi guidelines I provieded on the top left hand side of the window, under the picture. Most of you are not following the guidelines and, as a result, the same problems are being repeated on and on. PLEASE, READ THE GUIDELINES. There are also some of you who do not read the comments I give on your friends' posts, consequently, you repeat and commit the same errors they did. I do not have enough time to say something several times to several people.

    In Malayer It is a custom to walk in the afternoon because it is a very small city you can go everywhere you want by walking. All the streets have covered under shadow of trees thus in the summer there is the pleased breeze in the streets and people usually enjoy from the weather while they are going for a strolling in park street, where a small cool mountain stream flow down the street.

Comments: Well, I should thank you for not writing stories, but this is not based on inductive reasoning. This is only description without any central idea. NO topic sentence. NO controlling idea.

A student was ordered a loan book at beginning semester and he received after his exam

          When Ali was studying grammar he asked his friend to send him a grammar book. His friend Ahmad was living in Qom when he sent the book. After six month he came to Hamadan to visit his friend Ali when he was passing his final exam.

          Ali finished the exam. While he was coming back home he saw his friend beside the street and Ahmad get on to his car. Ali was angrier suddenly asked,” Why you did not sent that book to me I think I have to take grammar course again” Ahmad answered,” I sent the grammar book six month ago” Ali said,” What is wrong ?   I did not receive the book”

          They arrived house after a while the ball rang and Ahmad said, “Did you hear the bell? Open the door please” Ali replied, “Can you open the door? I am busy now” when Ahmad opened the door he saw a postman there the man gave him a package and said,” Because of wrong postal code we could not find your house” Ahmad gave the book to Ali and said,” you can use this book for next semester, and they laughed a lot.

Comments: Please write one paragraph essays. No dialogues. No conversation. Write only according to the model.

   Iraq had not made chemical weapons.   First Saddam Hussein had  experience in using chemical weapons He had ordered chemical attacks on Iran and on more than forty villages in his own country. But in the battle with American soldier the head of Iraq's military did not use chemical weapons and if he had technological capabilities to produce chemical weapons he would use that kind of weapons he would use against them.

    When Iraqi regimes collapsed there was no chemical factory found in Iraq. After five years American soldier could not fined even one chemical weapon that have been made in Iraq although they could make a factory in Iraq and attributed to Saddam Hussein, The American office preferred to be calm consequently people would forget that why they came to Iraq.

      Saddam Hussein had bought chemical weapons from other country and Iraq could not produce chemical weapons alone although, it gathers the most serious dangers of our age in one place’ the president Bush said in October 7, 2002 But Iraq could not produce chemical weapons.

Comments: Please read my post on inductive reasoning and write a paragraph based on the model example I provided. 

Last year when Mr. sharifi said to me, ‘we can practice together to pass the Baqerololom examination’ I had a lucky break

I did not tell anything about this exam to anyone because it was a mystery for me it was possible I could not pass the exam then I told to my friends Ali,’ I wanna tell you a secret, but you gotta promise to keep it under your hat.

We studied all high school books in that predicament because we don’t know what kind of book we should study.

When my phone rang and someone said, ‘you might register if you want to participate in the classes this course remember to bring your paper and credential.

Comments: Please write only one paragraph essays. This seems to be like a short story with many grammatical mistakes. If you read the previous posts and their comments, you will see that you should use a formal language. It means you cannot use expressions such as "gotta", "wanna", etc. because they are features of a conversational style. In accademic writing, one has to use a formal langauge. Please read the previous posts carefully.

"An Idle brain is the devil's workshop"

    This proverb implies the point that the reasons of crime are originated from a mind not occupied with thoughts or usefull ideas. Suppose a young unemployed boy or girl whose job is hanging around and prowling on streets doing nothing except idling away their idle hours. Undoubtedly, when one is hired in an organization or other working place (s)he would never find time to think about devilish imaginations or perilous thoughts. We can make this conclusion that in order to not be trapped in Satan's trap it is better to keep our mind on thinking and working.

T.Amini Golestani (tag)  

Comments: Dear Mr. Amini, please stop writing about proverbs. Instead, read my post on inductive reasoning and write according to the model. No proverbs again, please.

Cinema

Cinema has very influence on our life and our culture.In fact,there
is close relation between them.Cinema can change the our culture.
This changing can be good or bad.Nowadays,it is a tool in the hand of
politicans,e.g.the USA when wants to attack to Iraq makes a film
about the arabian terrorists.Thus it provide the mind of people
to support and accept it's attack.I believe that cinema forms
and changes the our life and it is very dengerous.

Comments: Please read the Farsi guidelines and modify the text.

Likes Like Likes

 Naturally, age, gender, educational degree, job and other factors are criteria on which individuals base their friendships on. Barely, for instance, you would see a young man sitting with an old one joking, playing games or going  to cinema. Even among animals it is hardly seen two different kinds or species live with each other. In Islam this coordination is highlighted and it is recommended many times that couples are prefered to be from one level, class and social dignity in order to not (not to) encounter difficulties in their life and future. So we can say this wellknown proverb that: "birds of feather flock together".

T.Amini Golestani

Comments: Grammatically this paragraph is very good, but it is not based on inductive reasoning. Read my post again and try to check each sentence by means of the "because test".

One of my best friends

One of my best friends that whom I love and can trust him is my neighbor. It is for ten years that we live in the same alley (neighborhood), so (but), I have not seen him to commit wrong and I love him because he is (also) a person who says always the truth, (.) Once, one complained of (about) him,(.) after a few days I realized that my neighbor was right. Another reason is that (In addition) whenever I travel to my city, (I) give the key of the home to him to take care of,(.) he never takes anything without my permition. In addition,he is very modest and respects others beliefs and values,(.) therefore, everybody can have good friends to trust them.

Dear Mr. Alem,

Thank you very much. The unity of the paragraph is to some extent good, but your main problem is punctuation. As you see, instead of period (.) you have used comma (,). Next time please read the guidelines I have wriiten in Farsi on the top left side of the webpage.

A. Sultani

All members of the blog are required to write a paragraph based on "inductive reasoning." To do so, follow these steps:

1. Write a topic sentence with a limited subject and a precise controlling idea about it;
2. Think over your claim, as stated in the topic sentence, and find at least three reasons to substantiate it;
3. To make sure your reasons really work, test each of them by placing the test word "because" between the topic sentence and the specific supporting sentence, which contains your reason. For example, let's consider the following topic sentece: "Using a digital dictionary is much more helpful than a printed one." One reason to support this topic sentence is "One can look up words in digital dictionaries more quickly." Now, to see if this reason really works, we can do the following test: "Using a digital dictionary is much more helpful than a printed one because one can look up words in the digital dictionaries more quickly." However, note that the test word "because" is only in your mind and should not be explicitly stated in the paragraph;
4. Next, arrange your reasons after the topic setence, using some transitional words such as first, second, finally, etc.;
5. Finally, add a concluding sentence to the paragraph through rewording the topic sentece. The following is a very simple paragraph of inductive reasoning, adapted from Mr. Tavakkol's paragraph.

    Using a digital dictionary is much more helpful than a printed one. First, one can look up words in digital dictionaries more quickly. In additon, cross-referring, which is occasionally needed to look up new words, is a really disappointing task in a huge printed dictionary, but with a digital dictionary your distance from other entries is just one click away. More importantly, in many digital dictionaries, you can easily listen to recordings, which show you how to pronounce a word. So, with a digital dictionary, you can enjoy quicksearching, easy cross-referring, and pronouciation recordings.

Good Luck

A. Sultani

MY  VILLAGE

Although my village is next to Yazd,but the climate is very clemently (clement / pleasant).Perhaps you don't believe that in summer you can see snow on mountain (mountains) and people don't use any cooler's tool (air conditioners). In the night (At nights) weather reaches low (it gets cold) and they must use duvet (duvets) and in the morning (cock crowing) they have to wear thermal dress (warm clothes) (.)

MASHHAD

    Mashhad is a good city. My mamily (family) and I went to that city. We stayed there (for) four days. We had a very good time there. We visited many places. We went to the holy shrain (shrine) several times. A lot of people go to mashhad each year. They come from different part (parts) of iran (Iran) and other contry (countries).

Dear Mr. Mirkhalili,

I should thank you for your hard work. You work harder than some younger students in the class.

1. Please pay more attention to SPELLING.
2. You could connect some of the sentences together. For example, you could say, "my family and I went to that city and stayed there for four days." This will make your paragraph more interesting to read.

A. Sultani

  "A littel leak will sink a great ship"

   The above stated proverb is one of the most remarkable ones which addresses those  people who do not care about problems which outwardly seem low-valued but in reality would change conditions to critical situations.One should never understimate little troubles, for even one seemingly negligble problem can eventually cause  irreparrable devastation. We take it for granted that everybody knows one festering wound unless be paid ample attention can spread overally and kill the person in the long run, So never belittle little riddles .

“All are not Theives that Dogs Bark at”

Do not rely on your eyes;  it means that sometimes one encounters a situation or faces a person seemingly suspicious , but at a second and deeper thought, you realize you have made a big mistake ; besides , being suspicious about everything and everyone is not recommended according to islamic maxims There is an Ayyah which states: “ان بعض الظن اثم” .Being polysuspicious is inflamatory and one of devil’s signs ; moreover, polysuspiciousness lowers your dignity and social values and eventually, will lead you to the middle of nowhere, so do not count on exterior matters 

Death

   Death isnot (is not) the end of the life. It is like (a) bridge through that (which) one can move (pass) to otherwhere (the other world). The death is a (the) beginning of the life in (the) other world. Someone thinks (Some may think) that our life is ended (ends) with the death. But (,) it isnot (is not) true, because bout (both) of the our intellect and religion say something opposite of their opinion. The death is a boat by that (which) one can move to otherside of the river of life.

A. Sultani

Using a software (digital) dictionary in (is) more useful than the paper one (improper diction: a printed one). A

If possible, use a software dictionary instead of the paper one. Software dictionaries let you look up words very quickly. For a man with trained hands, typing a word on the keyboard is much faster than flipping pages in a large, heavy book. At the stage of facing with so many new words, getting through a huge paper dictionary is disappointing. Furthermore, since the space of paper dictionary is limited, the puplisher has no way but to print the text in a small font, use short and limited examples, or convey the meaning of words in a quicker definition. In addition, in many software dictionaries, you can listen to recordings which show you how to pronounce a word.  So, with a software dictionary, you can enjoy quicksearching, Recordings, (wrong use of comma) have More (more) information and clearer layout. A

S. M. Tavakol

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Comments: Paragraph is well-organized. Only pay more attention to the choice of words.

IN THE PARK

I am seeing a picture of a park.

I see some people in it.A man and his child are sitting on a bench.The child,s father is reading a news paper,but his child is playing in the park and eating ice-cream.

I think he is six or seven years.

He is playing by bicycle and some time with ball.

An Allowance should be given to children when they do their perents commend. p

It is necessary for parents to give their children a weekly or monthly allowance. Many parents do that regardless of their childen behavior because they believe an allowance teaches children to be financially responsible. Other parents only give children an allowance as a reward for doing their job or when they have behaved properly. When I was about eight years old, my parents used to give me a list of shoping almost every day. If I could do the job properly, I got an allowance. But if I couldn't  I didn’t get my allowance. That fifty Tomans a week was all the incentive I needed to do their orders since there was always something I wanted to buy. Therefore, giving children an allowance when they have done their job is a smart parenting decision. a

Philosophical Hermeneutics

I want to speak about hermeneutic and especially about philosophical hermeneutic that was formed first (first introduced) by Gadamer who was (,) a German  philosopher.

Hermeneutic is the art of interpretation of text. It was used at the beginning strictly for (the) interpretation of Scripture (the Scriptures), but after that it was used for every text and finally used by Gadamer for existence.

He belived that being is (a kind of) text and everybody lie (?) in it and has hermeneutical experience (which everybody experiences). Every one always makes interpretation and tries to understand. For one is in a text and this needed to interpret to understand (Since everyone lives in a kind of text, he/she needs to interpret and understand it). On the other hand, world is a text (too).

In short, Gadamer, in fact, used the ontological hermeneutic.

SHOPPING

  My father goes shopping every day. He usually buys some fruits, vegetables and other things. Yesterday, he went shopping with his friend. They took a taxi to the shopping center. There were a lot of shoppers and they bought many things: apples, onions, dress (clothes). On the way home they went to the bakers. They bought some bread. Then if my father,s friend needed some meat (because my father's friend needed some meat), they went to the butchers.

Thank you Mr. Mirkhalili,

Please pay attention to the following points:

1. You wrote about one topic, i.e. shoping, and this is very good.
2. But, connect all sentences in one paragraph. I did this for you this time.
3. Indent only the first sentence of the paragrpah.
4. Leave one space after periods and commas.

Ali Sultani

   Our country is one of the great (greatest) bases (centers) of the culture & (and) civilization. There is a relationship between religion & (,) culture & (and) civilization. Religion is base of the culture & (and) culture is (the) base of the civilization. I mean:

Religion   ……..>  culture ………>   civilization

Iranians were familiar with some sciences like medicine & (and) astronomy. In Iran scientific activities had reached to its peak in the age of “Khosrov anoshirvan (Anoshirvan)” (531-78 AD). Center of this scientism (these scientific activities) was “Gondi (S)shapoor” (between Shoshtar and Dezful). They built schools there and invited scientists and teachers from Christians (the Christian world) there. Because all the kings were cruel and they kill (killed) whom (whoever) they want (wanted), Iranian people were annoyed and they look (looked) for a situation to get rid of the injustice and the kings. These circumstances maid (made) a good base for Islam to grow and spread there. They were ready to accept Islam. When Islam came to Iran, (the) majority of Iranians accept (accepted) it and get its sciences in their arms (welcomed Islamic sciences). I will mention the name of some of our scientists -that their (whose) names are familiar to the universe like the sun - in the future.

  Academic writing, such as research papers, and ordinary writing, like personal letters and diaries, are different with respect to the level of formality. Academic writing is formal. As a result, one cannot use certain grammatical constructions such as "contractions" and "first or second person point of view". For example, contracted forms like "don't", "isn't", "won't" etc. are not usually common in research or term papers. Accordingly, academic writers adopt a third person point of view, avoiding pronouns such "I" and "you" which suggest first and second person point of view, respectively. However, in ordinary informal writing, one can use both contractions and first or second person point of view because they suggest a kind of intimacy which is quite normal in this style of writing. Consequetly, maintaining the formality of adacemic writing is an important point novices should bear in mind. 

Comments on the Grammatical Structures:

1. Your sentence: You can fully imagine how wasteful of time it would be to spend it with a friend who is not sincere, truthful, or trustworthy.
2. My suggestion: You can imagine what a waste of time it is to be with a friend who is not sincere and trustworthy.
3. Your sentence:Once, with a ruthless betrayal of one of my so called friend, whom I shared one of my secret, I really was near to loss my face.
4. My suggestion: Once, one of my so-called friends ruthlessly betrayed a secret I shared with him and I was about to lose face.

Comments on the paragraph:

1. Your topic sentence, I guess, is "honesty is the most important feature to look for in a partner", but it is stated at a distance far away from the beginning of the paragrpah. The other two sentences ocurring before this topic sentence are very general and, as a result, not helpful. Furthermore, since you stated your topic sentence very late somewhere in the middle of the paragraph, you didn't have enouph space to develop it. Consequently, you claimed something which remained unsubstantiated.
2. To support your topic sentence you seem to start a narrative, but you failed to continue it. That one of your friends betrayed a secret of yours is not enouph. In a narrative, you should use specific, concrete words to make your narrative look real and believable. You could name your friend, for example "Amir", mention the time and place, for example "last year at the university of Tehran", elaborate on the secret itself, and explain in what way the betrayal of the sencret harmed you.
3. Writers usually do not say "in my opinion", because it is quite clear that what they write is their own opinion. This is a statement of the obvious.
4. In my second comment about what you wrote on television, I asked you to rewrite it in a different way. Please, do it.
5. Finally, try to rewrite this paragraph with the same topic sentence but develop it through extending the same narrative.

A good quality to look for in a partner. p

People make friends for the purpose of  gaining some benefit. For me, to evaluate the advantage of  choosing someone as a friend is to enjoy every minute of being with him. So, in my opinion, honesty is the most important feature to look for in a partner. You can fully imagine how wasteful of time it would be to spend it with a friend who is not sincere, truthful, or trustworthy. Once, with a ruthless betrayal of one of my so called friend, whom I shared one fo my secret, I really was near to loss my face. Having no honosty, one is not worthy to be choosen as a friend. p

S.M.Tavakol

Dear Mr. Tavakkol,

Since we are practicing paragraph writing at this stage, let's just concentrate on paragraph writing which is the cornerstone of essay writing. You are already familiar with paragraph structure which consists of a topic sentence and some supporting statements. Limiting the topic only on how a teacher can help his student, I can rewrite what you have written in the following one paragraph essay:

  In comparison with self-study, learning with the help of a teacher seems to have many advantages. First, a teacher can act as a guide to lead students to shortcuts towards their goal. With no good instructor, they may spend lots of time just for finding a solution to their very simple problems. In addition, a teacher mitigates the pressure on students. If they try to study by themselves, they must be strong-minded enough to keep on while with the persuasion of a teacher, whom they regard as their supervisor, they may be more likely to continue. Last but not least, to study by their own, they may have some problems they won’t be aware of. But, with the guidance of a devoted teacher, they can find out those out-of-sight mistakes.

Dear Mr. Tavakkol,

Thanks for posting to the weblog. Concerning your writing, three points are noteworthy:

1. Grammatically, the sentences are well-formed and punctuated correctly, with the exception that you should have written "people are used to getting maximum information."
2. But, regarding the structure of the information presented in the paragraph, i.e. the unity, I should say that your paragraph is not unified. The problem is that you are trying to put a big foot in a small shoe. In fact, the topic is too big to be developed in this short passage. I suggest you rewrite it in a single paragraph. But, this time write only on the negative impacts of television on family life. And, try to express your core idea about the negative impacts of television in a Topic Sentence at the beginning of the paragraph.
3. I should comment on your diction, choice of words. Instead of "inordinary", which is not common, you could have used "unusual."

Has TV destroyed communication?dd

     There are always good and bad consequences following technological development. q

Television has served many needs of  people. But, unfortunately it has destroyed communication among friends and family. The reasons are that people are used to get maximum information, more than they need, longing to be aware of every inordinary kind of material broadcasted by TV.q

    People are anyway busy these days with personal and professional works. On top of this, some channels like discovery, news, Kouthar keep people occupied with all the knowledge they need. They don’t see any time to meet friends or family. For instance, they are even having dinner watching television.w

    There are advantages and disadvantages of every thing created on the earth. It depends on the way that human beings utilize it.  w

S.M.Tavkol

Dear Mr. Assadollahi,

If you pay attention to the comments I added to your writing about diet, you will see that your main problem is "punctuation." You do not add a full stop [.] to the end of sentences and do not start a new sentence with a Capital Letter. So in your next piece of writing, please

1. add a full stop to the end of sentences,
2. and, start all sentences with a Capital Letter.

Last night in my dreams I saw myself in Mecca in Sacred mosque I saw Kaaba then I went in front of Gods house and sat next to its door, I start to cry and prayer, the sky was dark but the mosque was lighted by searchlight

            How beautiful that time was!

            Oh God can I be there again?
            Oh Allah never forget me and reminder me to never forget you I want to remember you always and everywhere.

       When I felt pain in my knee I went to Dr Lotphi’s office and visit him I told him about my  problem he asked me:” do you use dairy product seldom or mostly?” I answered:” I use sometime” he wrote a recipe and give me some calcium tablet and said:” your body need calcium and because the lack of calcium you feel pain on your knee you must use more dairy product like milk, cheese and yogurt every day 

My mother play with my little sister my sister is six years old she is quite mischievous she is happy and kind girl she asks me to play with her all the time she goes to kindergarten she paints beautiful picture and  she learned some song sometime she sings  a song.

                   She goes to kindergarten everyday last Friday when I told her to day is holyday she did not understand what I mean I told her all Friday’s she can stay home and play and she hah not to go to kindergarten she was doubtful she asked her mother “Mom why I have to stay at home in Friday” her mother answered because on Friday your kindergarten and all schools are closed therefore you can stay home and play with your mother.

New way of learning word

G -5

        G-5 is a new way of learning word and increasing your vocabulary. When I saw that reportage in TV I thought it is a commercial report and that way would not work but later when I know how it work I change my opinion because I understood that there is no way to memorize the word.

           After few days my brother suggested me to buy a box of this learning device when I bought a package of G-5 I was surprised in fact there was nothing worth that much money I have paid for that box.

          What that box really had? A CD and a divided square box and some piece of paper and a pamphlet I felt I swindled I saw the CD it was the film and show how distribute the box after that I studied that pamphlet carefully when I understood the box contain all thing I need to memorize the word I felt happy.

           I start to practice in the way that was easy you must write the word on the on side of paper and its definition on the other side and try to recite the meaning of that word if you are able to recite the definition it will go ahead in the box and if your are wrong it will go back in the first chart you should practice in this way not just sit bake and hope.

Writing at first is difficult but if you continue it will be easier than you thought because we never write our idea it is difficult to write them .IF we write our daily activity it help us to write and we can find some subject in our daily life

First try not to be neat If you write scratch it help you to write fast and then you can correct wrong word and sentence finally fair copy all your written text .

Do you know it is not difficult to write any time and any place if you desire to be a good writer this desire will help you to keep your pen in your hand and continue writing although it is difficult at first

 Although I want to help other student[s,] but some of them do not accept. Last Friday we had an appointment to study [our] phonetic book together[.] [We] we decide[d] to met each other at the stadium before [the] sport class at 9:00 pm

 I went there by the time [on time], but nobody came [the] except Mr. Mosavinasab[.] I was waiting [waited] for them but unfortunately they did not come. After half of hour [After half an hour] when we were studding [studying] chapter one[,] I saw my friend Mr. Mirkhalili[.] [He] he said, "Mr. Sharifi and Mr.Hajaboli are coming to stadium soon.” when[When] they arrived[,] we [were] discussing [the] rest of chapter one after that Mr. sharifi suggested to study chapter three and we studied.

 After discussion I told Mr. sharifi “I do not realize why other student who had problem with this lesson did not come?” he answered,”some people do not help themselves because they do not want and you can not do anything for them”  

Please carefully compare your writing with mine to see the differences.

To Mr. Mirkhalili and others,

Please pay attention to the following points:

1. There should be no space between the last word of a sentence and the full stop.
2. Ater full stops (.), commas (,), colons (:), semicolons (;), and othere punctuation marks, there should be a space. As a result, there is a space before the first word of a second sentence.
3. Please pay more attention to spelling. After finishing your first draft, read it carefully once for spelling and once more for grammatical errors.
4. At the beginning of paragraphs, there should be an indentation. In other words, start a line of print or writing further away from the edge of the page than the other lines. All paragraphs should be indented.
5. Word choice is very important. Check the words you are in doubt whether they can be used in your sentence in a dictionary like Oxford Advanced Learner's Dictionary.
6. Good Luck 

1   

 When I was eighteen, I went to the bloc for forty five days. The first friday after I came back, I went to a mosque for (to)  pray. In that time, my friend wanted (from) me to help him to open the windows of (the) mosque. (W) we brought a stick and I climbed it. Suddenly the stick side (slid) slip and I falled (fell down). then (Then I) broke my neck and I get (got) unconscious and I get quadriplegia. (A)after that I was taken  to (a) hospital in Yazd. (A)after two days the doctors disided (decided) to sended (send) me to Kashani hospital in Esfahan.i (I was) hospitalized there for two months.dribs and drabs (little by little) I felt better.

 2.

     Condition and healthiness is the best tooty from Allah. In the past summer I went to my city Yazd.One day went to the Sayyed-AL-Shohda hospital and saw there a lot of people.They were ill.some affection were more,for example:Daybit and Canser Diseses.The boss of hospital D.Akhavi saidʺ%20of people in Yazd have Canser".The experts bilive that:some consers depend to uranium diggings next the Yazd.

3. 

My uncle and his family are from Yazd. They now live in Tehran and have a difficult life in it (there). They think people in small towns have easy and happy life.

    They don’t have many of the problems that people have in big city (cities) like Tehran. There are not many cars in the streets and they don't spend a lot of time in the traffic every day.

     They can get the things they need easily and fast. People are not always in a harry (hurry), they help you when you need them.

Who was your date last night?

  Last night we had (a) free discussion in (our) class. (T) the conversation was about friendship and date (dating) in our country. Mr. Tabatabi said, "I want to improve your speaking ability. (T) try to speak English in class. (It) it is (an) important thing for me.”

  Student(s) had several opinions about date in our culture, but they agreed with (the) Islamic theory (perspective). In our culture people forbid friendship between girls and boys, but in Islam they can get married temporarily for a period of time if they accept their responsibility (and) they can trust each other. (For) for example, if the girl give birth to a baby his father (should) accept hem (it) as his child.

  One of students said he has never been out on a date with a girl. (Other) other one said, “ I had Islamic date” I expressed my opinion by one quick example then I  explained that by a narrative example I told a memory from my father I tried to convince student and teacher by  sentence form Imam Jomeh of  Mrayer it did really work.

Mr. Assadollahi,

I checked and corrected a number of sentences. The main problem in your writing is that you do not leave a full stop at the end of sentences and do not start the next sentence with a capital letter. Please try not to commit these errors any further.

Sultani