Tehran is a populous, busy and vociferous city. Many of the people live in suburbs and work in the city but the people who live and work in the city hurry out of their apartment every morning. The commuters hurry to bus stations every morning. Every one is in a hurry in this city. For many of the Tehranese, there is no time for breakfast. In the morning, the noise of traffic grows louder and louder and trucks load and unload. The most important problem is that the streets are full of buses and cars. Policemen blow their whistles to stop the traffic. Finally the motorbikes zigzag and make everybody nervous. Millions of people live in Tehran.

     I think some who wants to be a governor must be permitted by Allah. The sold owner of all things is Allah. Occupying the undisputed property of a owner is uncorrect, shameful and cruel. The definite requisite of governance is occupying in the humman’s life(soul),property,honour and chastity. Then everyone wants to be a governor must be permitted by Allah

   The rainfall is a so beauty and usefull event. In the morning, I wake up by hearing the tone of rainfall.The raindrops consecutive strike to windowpane. The rainfall effectuates the relaxing ton that it is very enjoyable.  The industrial factories produce the smoke that it makes pollution the air. Nvwrtheless,the rainfall make the air clean.Obviously,the rainwater gives to the beings  life.

Depression

Depression is one of the most common psychological problems, affecting nearly everyone. Each year over 17 million American adults experience period of clinical depression. Depression can interfere with normal function, and frequently causes problems with work, social and family adjustment. It causes pain and suffer not only to those who have disorder, but also to those who care about them. Serious depression can destroy family life as well as the life of depressed person.

Depression is a psychological condition that changes how you think and how you feel, and affects your social behavior and sense of physical well-being. We have all felt sadness at a time, but that is not depression. Sometimes we feel tired from working hard, or discouraged when faced with serious problems. These are not depression. These feelings usually pass in a few days or weeks . If these feelings begin to interfere with work, school or family responsibilities, it may be depression.

Depression is caused by an imbalance of brain chemicals, alongside other factors.It needs to be treated.

The Seventh Day of the
Month of Zee al-Hajjeh
Martyrdom Anniversary of
Imam Muhammad al-Baqir(A.S.)

The Fifth Infallible Imam of the Shi'ites in the World Imam Muhammad al-Baqir(A.S.)
"The Initiator of Sciences and the Heir of the Knowledge of the Prophets"
was martyred by poisoning on the seventh day of the month of Zee al-Hajjeh in the year 114 Hejree in the holy city of Madineh by the sentence of Omayeh caliph. The Holy Imam(A.S.) was buried in Baqi cemetery in holy city of Madineh.
On this sad and sorrowful occasion I extend our Heartfelt Condolences to all of followers and lovers of Holy Ahlul Bayt (A.S.) in the world ,particularly my teachers and classmates that having activity in the university, which has been named with this shining presence.

     Careless drivers are main cause of accidents. Because recent statistics show that most of accidents happen while they drive so fast and pass from no passing places. Also they drive while feeling tired so they get sleepy soon and dangres accident happens. Moreover thire cars has some problems such as exhausted tire that suddenly explodes. As a resalt sloppy drivers cause many car accidents.

public place in qom are not good nevertheless there are much mony for build this place but they did not . when people want to go for walking  there are not big parkand there are dirty small park and there is not enough tree and grass also securty in  park is not good and there are not police in park,

public place in qom are not good nevertheless there are much mony for build this place but they did not . when people want to go for walking  there are not big parkand there are dirty small park and there is not enough tree and grass also securty in  park is not good and there are not police in park,

There are many ways to controll your anger. First, changing of the physical position,for example, if you are standing sit down. No wonder, this change followed by mental position change. Second way to manage your wrath is silence, that is, do not say anything and be quiet. Anoher way to restrain the anger is to perform minor ablution(wudu) as our prophet says that the anger is from Satan and he has been created of the fire and it dose not still but with the water(wudu). More importantly, Paying attention to the outcoms of vilence is one of the ways to controll your anger,as the prophet says that the anger corrupts the faith as the vinegar corrupts the honey. Then, these are known to be ways of controlling ones anger.

Every body prefer to study in library than other places

When somebody go to library he can find every book

And every subject he want .

                  If   reader get tired from a subject he can change it  . 

In library every body are study and it is good encourager for

Study 

Psychologists say places of study should be quiet and one place

And library is like this place.

When we ask from every body coming in library  they say we can study more in library than other place.

My father is very serious man .every thing i want to do or choose for entertainment or education he will check 'for example he know all of my frinds 'sometim he says ;release that how have  not good apparent;even idonot allow to invite or accept any frins invitation, also i was not allow to wach TV more than ane hover ,eather,continuiiy he reviw my CD films, finally  heconcider every thing to great edocation ,although,my courceis well he just accept one grade wich not exept higher  one as an illustratin 20.l

Last winter I rent home in Qom and brought my furniture Qom with truck ,driver of truck  fazed me. Consider ,before he and worker came and loaded furniture , I had told him my furniture is very round  but he had said : no problem , the truck admits for all of it  , but when he came , he said it is very so he asked  me money  more his fee . Also I  fazed when we arrived Qom and he didn’t bring his truck in dead end that my house situated in that .More importantly ,when we brought my furniture in the house we saw  my closet , my bed and some chairs were damaged and I told him that , but he said  it doesn’t  related me , the worker didn’t attend when thy had put furniture in the truck. No wonder I found the driver the man doesn’t do his duty and he want to wrest more money.                    

Nowadays singers' sounds (voice) that produced by computer or modified by it (produced and modified by computer) are (is) not a good substitution (substitute)for the traditional (original) sounds (voice) that (are) produced by singers (themselves). Our body belongs to the nature and it is related to it and there is a correspondence between our (voice) sounds and the nature. We may enjoy hearing or listening to the sounds that we have not heard them before. That is indeed the reason that  are attracted to that kind of songs that (why) we change the frequency of sounds and some other effects that don’t exist in the nature. We computerize the sounds and enjoy them. Indeed we enjoy Mechanical and electronic tools not the songs themselves. Indeed the message is not important to us when we used (listen to) the computerized songs. It (is) somehow related to our mental problems.

Thanks .

Comments: The idea is very interesting, but you couldn't develop it in a unified manner. Try to rewrite it, after removing the grammatical problems and checking the unity.

 Although the wish is good but the long whishes (desires) are harmful to mankind and has (have) (destructive) consequences. Allah addressed Moses-the prophet- (prophet Moses) (,")O Moses, Do not prolong your wishes in the world to be hard heartened (??) , the callous is far away of me("). On the other hand, Imam Ali peace be upon him says(,") whoever that has long wishes, his deeds will be lesser and close in (?), therefore, he dose (does) not perform his duties well("). Moreover, long wishes cause to blow over (??) and forget the Hereafter. So, to be free of the harms and difficulties it is appropriate not (to) prolong your wishes.

Dear Mr. Alem,

Your are improving very well. However, apart from the grammatical mistake, you need to pay more attention to Coherence. The paragraph doesn't seem to be coherent, because the supports are not explicitly related to the topic sentence. Please rewrite the paragraph, using the chapter in our textbook as a guide for improving the coherence.

Deductive essay

MOTOR’S DANGER

  Motor cycle beside its advantages is not safe enough as car for the cyclists and even for non cyclist people. The terrific rules for those who want to have or ride bikes should be stricter so every one who has not the suitable qualities could not ride motor cycle. The officials should make increases in the prices of forfeits. In addition the motor companies should provide their products with best qualities that motors need. There should be made some changes in some fields to prevent dangers of the motors.    

         As you know the 14 sinlesses  are best people and any one wants to know them look at the Twelve imam Shiite, because the meaning of Shiite is a adherent and the  Shiites claim  that they cling their imams .Imam Sadeq  has adverted  to this fact as  he has said be adorn for us not mortification . Therefore is necessary for any of Shiite to be careful about his actions and  doesn’t do anything is known as a improper actions. In addiction  any of shittes  shouldn’t do  anything is not as the position of imams  and  damage  their character . So as the people put our behavior on the Shiite and our imams we must be careful about our actions

Health insurance is so expensive. There are billions of people that wish to use health insurance but they can not. Many of people do not refer to doctor even rhey are sick. Large number of worker work on hard job without any health insurance. So health insurance bills must be affordable.(deductive paragraph)

We should try to keep the heart more healthy. Everyone should do a regular exercise to make the muscle of the heart stronger and to burn the harmful fat around it. We need to eat fruits, vegetables, and low-fat meats to keep our heart healthy. More importantly, we should have regular physical checkups and try is not to smoke at all. p

S.M.Tavakol

Governments are responsible to make the society a better place to live. Public transportation system should be improved to help people not to be forced to use their own vehicles. So, the air can be more clean, the roads less crowded, and the people can commute faster. Some local sport clubs should be founded to lead the youth spend their free time in there. More importantly, some strategies should be applied to make the society more safe. Obviously, it is the government’s duty to help people enjoy a better life. p

S.M.Tavakol

Management is an interdisciplinary science. In addition management a manager should know aconomy,polity,sociolody and psychology. Because on the one hand a manager should be aware of external invironment of organization,so he needs to know aconomy and polity and on the other hand he shold be aware  of internal invironment of organization so he needs to know sociology and psychology to controls employees.                               

           Useing publice transportation is essential and helpful for our society.

 It is essential because it saves your time. if you use publice transportation there is no traffice in the street ,thus you can be on time and it cause rate of air and enviermental poulotion comes down as the statistics are agree with this. And it cause we don’t have healthy problem and it solve some healthy problems ,therfor; using publice transportation is essential and helpful for our society.

 Imam mehdi has vanished about 1150 years ago. He wanted to save his life becouse enemies decided to pursue and assassinate him. He did not like to accept and support the government of Abbasian. since the social situation was not appropriate enough for him to establish the globol government of justice he decided not to be appearent.   

Nowadays the job market is competitive. Therefore; companies and employers are ready to meet the challenges of the next year. So the employment's methods will change. Career preparation is become more and more important to young people and employers too. They imploy professional persons. For many, career preparation is the primary reason to go to college. Also being experienced, having enough knowladge are important things. Therefore;so-called situation in job market is much more effective for production of the products with high qualities in the future time

Experience is the best teacher in our life. The most important,and sometimes the hardest lessons we learn in life come from our participation in situations. You can not learn everything from a book. I think that the most important lessons can not be taught,they have to be experienced. No one can teach us how to get along with others or how to have selfe-respect or how to fal in love,and get married. Although parents and teachers are valuable sources of advice,but experiencing our own triumphs and disasters is really the only way to learn how to deal with life. 

Studing in university have some oblhgation for scolars.  they shold undertake to pass all terms for instance tree years for licentiantes, if they leve beafor they most pay all expenditure wich university had pay ror thir edocation they most attend to daily classes ,if they have mor than tree absence for two units they being deprives to give that examination, finally they most give examination and take   good  mark.

Democratic Basij is the symbol of the honor and pride of Islamic republic. People who have strong desire and belief they always are proud and mighty, so we can consider the Basij one of the evident case of honor. In addition to the belief, making effort and esprit of the Basij people in some situations caused some successes in scientific, cultural, political fields. On the other hand, mentality and spirit of sacrifice has impressed on policy of other Moslems to some extent that they have chosen the Basij as an example for themselves. So we can say that the Basij is more efficient group in our Islamic system.

Committing sins have bad worldly and otherworldly effects on individuals. When Allah made a covenant with the children of Israel, they should worship him and obey his commands they disobeyed and used to commit sins, so what shall be the recompense (effects) of those who do evil deeds but (except) degradation in the worldly life and on the Day of Resurrection to be returned to the most terrible punishment. In addition their life shall be narrow, as Imam Sadeg peace be upon him says when the servant of Allah commits a sin he wanders from his provision and remains in narrow life. Therefore, it is better we remember, obey Allah and keep ourselves out of sins so that to be prosper.  

Living without computer is impossible. To day we use it in home. Workers and officers can not work in factories and offices without it. When we are going to get cash from bank we have to learn computer. Housewife con not uses washing machine and dish washer without learning computer and they are practicable tools. Finally we can not do many difficult calculations. (میرخلیلی)

Inductive paragraph

Nowadays in spite of scientific advances, many of people are superstitious. Some of lettered people believe that number 13 is unfortunate and disastrous, so some buildings omit a thirteen floor. Some of intelligent persons still believe that the arrangement of tea leaves in a cup predicts the future. Some of educated people believe that they should delay their work if they sneeze.   

Although some people think a good prayer is impossible and it is just for mystic , the  good prayer is easy and possible . Many of people think a good prayer should accompany with crayying , this idea is not crocct , because it is not told us pray with crayying  , so the crayying is not as a part of prayer . In addiction it is wanted us just  to regard the ceremony of prayer , not any thing else . Third ,when we pray it is not nesecery to be in a good temper , because it is wanted us to pray in all situation an it is obvious in all of times we are not in agood temper . Therefore , agood prayer doesn’t need crayying and having a good temper ,so it will be easy .   

We have various theory (theories) about effective factors on human character. every (Many) psychologists, anthropologists and sociologists have offered different viewpoints. Ebne Khaldoun as social intellectual in his book by the name of (entitled) Ebne Khaldoun's preface (Preface) has this believing that (believes that) geography is an effective element on human character. he (He)claims that those who live in a cold region (regions) and mountainous zones are hot-tempered, vice versa  (contrarily) those who live in moist, mild and pure weather have (a) calm mentality. the (The) resons that Khaldoun has offered (offers) consist of:

1) he's had many experimental examines (experiments) in both of (types of) weathers that is: mountanious and humid zones and has gotten result.

2) who ever (whoever) lives in cold region have (has) to fight

with rough nature from their childhood perioud (period); so that they can remain alive.

3) and the last reson that is mine include (includes) in putting this claim to the proof; it means that we can judge those who training (lived) in montinous zones like some Turkish (Turks) and those who live (lived) in mild weather like (the people in the) northern of Iran to demonstrate this idea (claim).

Comments: As you see, there grammatical, spelling, and diction problems. This shows that you are a careless writer and nobody takes a careless writer seriously. So, please pay more attention to what you write.

   The other problem is, when mentioning Ibn-e Khaldun's reasons, you started new paragraphs, which is not preferable here. Continue writing one-paragraph essays at this stage. 

   But your major problem is the topic sentence. Since the topic sentence is too broad, you could not develop it properly. Please rewrite the paragraph with a new topic sentence only about Ibn-e Khaldun's view about the effects of climate on people.

Rivers have always been important to people. Rivers (They) provide water for drinking and growing crops. For some people, rivers are the main source of making food. Thay can feed on fish, oyster, and some local bird (birds) which usually live near a river. Rivers provide great transportation routes which is sometimes the only way to get around. Historically, the first civilizations have been made along rivers. So, rivers have been playing a great role in supplying the need (needs) of people.s

S. M. Tavakol

Comments: Concerning unity, the paragraph is very well unified. But it lacks coherence. Try to make it coherent by adding some transitional words. You can also learn more about coherence by studying the next chapter of out textbook. 

Gasoline is one of our country's problems. Although the main export of Iran is oil, importing several million liters of gasoline has made it a dependent country in this field. Because of high price of gasoline in the countries from which Iran imports it, the government of Iran should pay a great deal of money as subsidization. In addition, the consumption of gasoline causes air pollution and very dangerous consequences. 

Comments: Basically, this is a good paragraph, but the idea developed in the paragraph is not much interesting because it is too broad. Try to concentrate on one of the ideas expressed in the paragraph like "air pollution" and write a paragraph about it. 

   The (text) books of (the) seminary school need to be revised . First, they are old, they have been written nearly 300 years ago or furthermore (more). In addition(,) they have difficult expressions, they take much (of the) time of (the) students so (but) they don’t understand the mine (main) subjects. More importantly(,) they have not been written like as school book (textbook), some of them are just note (commentaris). Therefore, it is very necessary that the books of seminary to be revised.

Comments: Except for the mistakes I marked in the text, the paragraph is very good, unified and coherent. Thanks.

  Having a motor cycle in city like Qom, (no comma, wrong use of comma) help (helps) people to save their time and money in doing their daily works (activities). One can use (ride) his motor cycle in front of (from) his house to his work place without any inconvenience, so he is not forced to take walk toward the main street and be waiting (wait) for taxis. While many cars get stuck in a heavy and noisy traffic jam, (a) motor cyclist can pass through all stopped cars easily and get to his work. A motor cyclist can park his cycle every where without wasting (waisting) much time to find an empty place for parking. By using motor cycle people are not supposed to spend money as much as (as much money as) using (a) car or taxi. There for (Therefore) using (a) cycle instead (a) car in cities like Qom is more profitable and comfortable.

Comments: A good paragraph, except for the grammatical mistakes.

    Third world countries, specially deprived ones like Afferican nations are known as developing or underdeveloped countries not developed ones. Why such an issue is common among underdeveloped countries can be answered by analysing several factores: firstly, they are suffering from interior problems like poverty, increasing tendency of their population, brain drain, unemployement and etc. Secondy, these countries face exterior problems such as being colonized, getting vast sums of exterior lones, being uniproducer, selling raw matterials in low prices and so on. The last problem not the least one is cultural deficiencies like superstitious beliefs (in India, for instance, from one hand there are lots of hungry people and from other hand they worship cows and eatable animals; consequently, they can not eat them), tendency to consuming not producing, illiteracy, not having hope for continuing their lives and etc. When we gather these problems together we will immediately notice that unless they are not solved, this process will continue and the 3rd world nations will remain in this situation.

T.amini

Many farmers have hard days. Summer season for agricultures specially rice farmers have treble days, They have not any instrument for reaping harvest so that they do this with hands among long days and because they have just one job have not much money to get some laberers, Whether condition is other point for their hardship and stress, rain and rapid whether changes have bad effect on growing and picked harvest befor gathering. Therefor, they live these days hardly.v

  The transportation’s system in Yazd is better than(that in) Qom. The number of taxis and buses (in Yazd)are (is) more than (in) Qom. The streets in yazd are broad and wide but in Qom (they) are too narrow for cars to pass. The people notice (observe) to traffic lows (laws) but in Qom the traffic violation (violating traffic laws) is more. The presence of police in Yazd is more predominate (predominant) than Qom and the policeman guide the traffic. Finally(,) in Yazd the most of people don’t (do not) use private (their) cars and (but) use public cars (transportation).

Comments: Paragraph unity is very good, but there are grammatical and spelling problems. Please check how comparative adjectives and adverbs are used.

   Ali Ibn Abitaleb was the first rightful leader of Muslims after holy prophet Muhammad's death. When the holy prophet had brought his fam-ily together and invited them to accept his religion and said that the first person who accepts his call would be his viceregent (deputy), the only     person to accept his call was Imam Ali. The holy prophet said to Imam Ali ''You are to me what the prophet Harun was to Prophet Moses''. The prophet of Islam upon returning from the farewell pilgrimage (the last hadj in his life) stopped in Ghadir khum(,) assembled the people and chose Imam Ali as the first leader of Islam.

Comments: With many thanks to Mr. Haj-Abuli, I should say that this paragraph is very good with a unified structure. The only problem might be Coherence.