There are many ways to controll your anger. First, changing of the physical position,for example, if you are standing sit down. No wonder, this change followed by mental position change. Second way to manage your wrath is silence, that is, do not say anything and be quiet. Anoher way to restrain the anger is to perform minor ablution(wudu) as our prophet says that the anger is from Satan and he has been created of the fire and it dose not still but with the water(wudu). More importantly, Paying attention to the outcoms of vilence is one of the ways to controll your anger,as the prophet says that the anger corrupts the faith as the vinegar corrupts the honey. Then, these are known to be ways of controlling ones anger.

 Although the wish is good but the long whishes (desires) are harmful to mankind and has (have) (destructive) consequences. Allah addressed Moses-the prophet- (prophet Moses) (,")O Moses, Do not prolong your wishes in the world to be hard heartened (??) , the callous is far away of me("). On the other hand, Imam Ali peace be upon him says(,") whoever that has long wishes, his deeds will be lesser and close in (?), therefore, he dose (does) not perform his duties well("). Moreover, long wishes cause to blow over (??) and forget the Hereafter. So, to be free of the harms and difficulties it is appropriate not (to) prolong your wishes.

Dear Mr. Alem,

Your are improving very well. However, apart from the grammatical mistake, you need to pay more attention to Coherence. The paragraph doesn't seem to be coherent, because the supports are not explicitly related to the topic sentence. Please rewrite the paragraph, using the chapter in our textbook as a guide for improving the coherence.

Democratic Basij is the symbol of the honor and pride of Islamic republic. People who have strong desire and belief they always are proud and mighty, so we can consider the Basij one of the evident case of honor. In addition to the belief, making effort and esprit of the Basij people in some situations caused some successes in scientific, cultural, political fields. On the other hand, mentality and spirit of sacrifice has impressed on policy of other Moslems to some extent that they have chosen the Basij as an example for themselves. So we can say that the Basij is more efficient group in our Islamic system.

Committing sins have bad worldly and otherworldly effects on individuals. When Allah made a covenant with the children of Israel, they should worship him and obey his commands they disobeyed and used to commit sins, so what shall be the recompense (effects) of those who do evil deeds but (except) degradation in the worldly life and on the Day of Resurrection to be returned to the most terrible punishment. In addition their life shall be narrow, as Imam Sadeg peace be upon him says when the servant of Allah commits a sin he wanders from his provision and remains in narrow life. Therefore, it is better we remember, obey Allah and keep ourselves out of sins so that to be prosper.  

  Studying in Bager-ol-uloom University is more useful than other universities. As far as I (am) concerned, most of Tollab students are poor and they cannot afford to pay more expenses[.] so, (since) this university is cheep (free of charge) and there is no need to pay much money, (they can afford studying at there). Furthermore, the chiefs, managers and some professors have motivation on teaching and helping the students to solve their problems. In addition, the environment and space of this university is religious (this university has a religioius atomspher) and the teachers instruct (teach) (according to) beliefs of Islam (the Islamic beliefs) and the Islamic Revolution. Therefore, as much as possible, studying in Bager-ol-uloom would be better than others.

Dear Mr. Alem,

Concerning paragraph organization, this paragraph is very good. It is clearly based on inductive reasoning. However, please pay more attention to diction, the way words are used in writing.

One of my best friends

One of my best friends that whom I love and can trust him is my neighbor. It is for ten years that we live in the same alley (neighborhood), so (but), I have not seen him to commit wrong and I love him because he is (also) a person who says always the truth, (.) Once, one complained of (about) him,(.) after a few days I realized that my neighbor was right. Another reason is that (In addition) whenever I travel to my city, (I) give the key of the home to him to take care of,(.) he never takes anything without my permition. In addition,he is very modest and respects others beliefs and values,(.) therefore, everybody can have good friends to trust them.

Dear Mr. Alem,

Thank you very much. The unity of the paragraph is to some extent good, but your main problem is punctuation. As you see, instead of period (.) you have used comma (,). Next time please read the guidelines I have wriiten in Farsi on the top left side of the webpage.

A. Sultani