Vocabularies play a magnificant role in learning English. According to Mr. Aryanpour, the writer of a very famous dictionary, words in English are like bricks in a building. The more one has bricks the better and more glorious he can build his construction. But this is not all about words. In every aspect of English like reading and writing, pupils are supposed to have bunch of words kept in mind in order for them to step up better and faster. The last point but not the least is that, words are the only one with which a teacher can increase the students' eagerness of learning English.So it is clear that, learning English but not the words is completely out of work
+ نوشته شده در چهارشنبه پنجم دی 1386ساعت 0:7 توسط محمود انصاری
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Modern women are affried of natural childbirth. That is why many women prefer not to give birth to a baby in order to keep themselves away from such a thing. According to many statistics, nowadays although women are aware of many disadvantages of Sezarin surgury, but yet there is a big tendency toward Sezarian. So beacause of this fear, there are lots of advertisement in media that try to enquarge and prepare women for overwelming this phobia.
+ نوشته شده در دوشنبه نوزدهم آذر 1386ساعت 22:1 توسط محمود انصاری
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Scientists beilive that natural childbirth presents better health to people than Sezarian surgery. In the first place, children who are born in a natural way are more clever and gain their abilities much sooner than some who are born in surgery. Furthermore , not only children borning naturally are physically less at the risk of infections, but also they are mentally more resistant to disorders. Above all, mothers in natural childbirth will not be annoyed by some problems like backache which are widespread in Sezarian surgery. Therefore, natural childbirth provides safer posibilities for both child and mother in regard of Sezarian surgery
+ نوشته شده در دوشنبه نوزدهم آذر 1386ساعت 21:59 توسط محمود انصاری
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Aerobic exercise has many benefits. It is unimaginable how much joy and delightfulness is laid behind aerobics. more than that (Moreover), the influence of aerobics in the circulation of blood all over the body which conclude (results in) better heart working is incredible. But for the most part, music and physical exercise simoltaneously as it occurs in aerobics will cause a release in mind and prepare it for work. Accordingly aerobics is a beneficial choice not only for happyness and health, but for release (of the mind).
Comments: Very Good.
+ نوشته شده در جمعه دوم آذر 1386ساعت 23:58 توسط محمود انصاری
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Aerobic exarcise has many benefits. Last month, I sent my daughter to this exercise (an aerobics club). I can never forget it when I saw her after her first day; so happy with lots of joy, so talkitive (talkative) with full of energy. But this is not all about Aerobic. According to statistics, people who go to Aerobic (clubs) regularly are two times less at the risk of heart attack. Above all, music and sport simoltaneously as it occurs in Aerobic (aerobics) will cause a release in mind and prepare it for work. So aerobic as an sport is a beneficial choice for happyness, health, and release.
Comments: Apart from the errors I marked in the text, I should add that this paragraph, although a good one, is not solely based on inductive reasoning as I elaborated in my post. You used narrative, reasoning and description in a combined form. Please read my post on inductive reasoning again and rewrite the paragraph.
+ نوشته شده در شنبه بیست و ششم آبان 1386ساعت 23:38 توسط محمود انصاری
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Hardships will define real friends for you. For exampie in a travel it is possible that your money be lost or stolen. So in these situations a real friend will help you but the unreal one will not. The other case is ilness. when you are ill a friend will not leave you alone. Yesterday my wife went to a pool because of her backacke. when she wanted to walk on the pool, as her doctor had prescribed for her, suddenly one girl hit her accidentically. So she frightened to walk anymore, but fortunetaly a friend of her who was swimming there helped and supported her from behind. according to a famous proverb" a friend in need is a friend indeed." This proverb confirms that in bad situations when you need some help a real friend will come and get your hand
+ نوشته شده در یکشنبه بیستم آبان 1386ساعت 14:55 توسط محمود انصاری
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Unfortunetly many farmers have hard life. Most of the time they have to work from dawn to dusk without any rest. Although they work all day long, they earn a little benefit from their crops. I remember 2 years ago my uncle, a farmer, decided to breed rice in his farm, but after some months when he wanted to harvest, a big storm came and all his crops destroyed. According to Mr. Ghaznavi the minister of agriculture about 40 percent of farmer's products are at the risk of destruction by bad weather. As you see peasants always challenge with many problems.
+ نوشته شده در جمعه هجدهم آبان 1386ساعت 14:12 توسط محمود انصاری
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Sometimes derbies can cause many hardships for their viewers. Since the viewers are fond of their teams,they are under a high pressure of the match.So with this rate of stress,every stupid behavior like breaking or insulting can be expected from them.I remember last year,when Piroozi and Esteghlal had a match, suddenly my uncle Bagher kicked his TV hard because Piroozi had won the match.According to Dr.Rezaiian, the dean of Health Care Assosiation, the viewers of derbies are twise as much in the risk of heart attack.As you see being hurt from derbies is something that people should be worry about.
Mahmood Ansari
Dear Mr. Ansari,
Please pay attention to the following comments about your paragraph:
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The paragraph is well-structured and unified. Thanks a lot. This is a very good paragraph.
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But, pay more attention to the puncutation marks. After periods and commas, leave one empty space. I marked them red.
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Don't say "should be worry about." Say "should worry about."
Ali Sultani
+ نوشته شده در پنجشنبه هفدهم آبان 1386ساعت 23:46 توسط محمود انصاری
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