ACADEMIC WRITING

Last winter I rent home in Qom and brought my furniture Qom with truck ,driver of truck  fazed me. Consider ,before he and worker came and loaded furniture , I had told him my furniture is very round  but he had said : no problem , the truck admits for all of it  , but when he came , he said it is very so he asked  me money  more his fee . Also I  fazed when we arrived Qom and he didn’t bring his truck in dead end that my house situated in that .More importantly ,when we brought my furniture in the house we saw  my closet , my bed and some chairs were damaged and I told him that , but he said  it doesn’t  related me , the worker didn’t attend when thy had put furniture in the truck. No wonder I found the driver the man doesn’t do his duty and he want to wrest more money.                    

         As you know the 14 sinlesses  are best people and any one wants to know them look at the Twelve imam Shiite, because the meaning of Shiite is a adherent and the  Shiites claim  that they cling their imams .Imam Sadeq  has adverted  to this fact as  he has said be adorn for us not mortification . Therefore is necessary for any of Shiite to be careful about his actions and  doesn’t do anything is known as a improper actions. In addiction  any of shittes  shouldn’t do  anything is not as the position of imams  and  damage  their character . So as the people put our behavior on the Shiite and our imams we must be careful about our actions

Although some people think a good prayer is impossible and it is just for mystic , the  good prayer is easy and possible . Many of people think a good prayer should accompany with crayying , this idea is not crocct , because it is not told us pray with crayying  , so the crayying is not as a part of prayer . In addiction it is wanted us just  to regard the ceremony of prayer , not any thing else . Third ,when we pray it is not nesecery to be in a good temper , because it is wanted us to pray in all situation an it is obvious in all of times we are not in agood temper . Therefore , agood prayer doesn’t need crayying and having a good temper ,so it will be easy .   

   The (text) books of (the) seminary school need to be revised . First, they are old, they have been written nearly 300 years ago or furthermore (more). In addition(,) they have difficult expressions, they take much (of the) time of (the) students so (but) they don’t understand the mine (main) subjects. More importantly(,) they have not been written like as school book (textbook), some of them are just note (commentaris). Therefore, it is very necessary that the books of seminary to be revised.

Comments: Except for the mistakes I marked in the text, the paragraph is very good, unified and coherent. Thanks.