Deductive 2
Although the wish is good but the long whishes (desires) are harmful to mankind and has (have) (destructive) consequences. Allah addressed Moses-the prophet- (prophet Moses) (,")O Moses, Do not prolong your wishes in the world to be hard heartened (??) , the callous is far away of me("). On the other hand, Imam Ali peace be upon him says(,") whoever that has long wishes, his deeds will be lesser and close in (?), therefore, he dose (does) not perform his duties well("). Moreover, long wishes cause to blow over (??) and forget the Hereafter. So, to be free of the harms and difficulties it is appropriate not (to) prolong your wishes.
Dear Mr. Alem,
Your are improving very well. However, apart from the grammatical mistake, you need to pay more attention to Coherence. The paragraph doesn't seem to be coherent, because the supports are not explicitly related to the topic sentence. Please rewrite the paragraph, using the chapter in our textbook as a guide for improving the coherence.
